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Tuesday, 10 September 2013

Tantalizing Tuesday - Alone


Hello again, and welcome to Tantalizing Tuesday. The idea is pretty similar to that of the Flash Fiction Friday, however, I get to choose the picture this time, and also it is 200 words, or as near as. 
So I have chosen a picture from:
 
 
 
 
So here is my 199 words.
 
“You don’t understand, I have to get away. I feel like I can’t breath anymore.”
“But Beth, please, I need you.”
She reached out to stroke his face, catching a fallen tear as she did. His heart ached at her touch. “No you don’t, you are strong. You will be fine here without me, you’ll see.”
Matt knew she spoke the truth. He also knew that this was his home. There was no other place for him to belong. He couldn’t say the same for Beth. She had itchy feet for a while now. He had watched as the light in her eyes faded with every day that she was trapped in this small town. Beth was destined for something bigger, always had been, and he knew that better than anyone. This was her one chance to follow her dream. As much as his heart broke, he couldn’t hold her back, he knew she would die inside.
No she had to go. He stood up straight and took a deep breath, taking one last look at her in the stabled they had grown up in. Her loyal horse standing by quietly as if he knew she was leaving too.
 
I hope you liked the snippet. There are lots more to read, just follow the link below.
 
 
See you next week with another pic. Until then, take care.
 
J.P. Stevens
xXx
 

24 comments:

  1. *sniff*

    Saying good bye is never easy.

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  2. I did enjoy this piece, JP, very much. I think it is a wonderful beginning for a much longer story and I'd like to see where you take this. (Editor's note: correct "stabled" spelling. The photo is very sad, in a distance as if we are eavesdropping on a great pain. Loved it:) xo

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    1. Thanks for highlighting my typo, will amend when I get the chance to take on the full version. There is a story niggling in the back of my mind, but we shall have to see ;-) Thank you for reading x

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  3. Goodbye is a hard word to say. Love the piece, very heartfelt.

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    1. Thank you Michaela, glad it touched you. x

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  4. Heartfelt. I hope Beth is happy with whatever she finds when she goes. Great tease

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    1. Thank you Naomi. I'm sure she will. xx

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  5. very nice interpretation of your picture. I liked your 200 words :)

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  6. s intrigued with your picture and how you wrote your story to the depth of the emotions within. Great.

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    1. Thank you Pablo, for such a lovely comment. xx

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  7. Oh man, that's heartbreaking :-(. I have to say it's a good teaser, but I hope Matt will be able to cope, and good luck to Beth.

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    1. ahh without spoiling too much, the grass is always greener, and no matter where you go, home is always home! Thanks for commenting. xx

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  8. Very heartbreaking piece written with such great description of feeling and emotion

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  9. That tugged at my heart. Beautifully written.

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    1. I'm glad it delivered as I had hoped. Thank you Paloma. xx

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  10. One of life's painful but inevitable situations, captured with honesty. Good to be teasing with you, J.P.

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    1. Hey Jake, thanks for stopping by and commenting. Looking forward to another tease next week. xx

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